Re: ACTION-515 completed: Review the overview document

Hi Matt,

I have addressed your comments and committed them. Comments inline. There might still some more changes as I turn to Andy's comments I hadn't yet addressed.
 
On 15 Aug 2011, at 17:56, Matthew Perry wrote:

> My review is below. It's basically editorial comments.
> 
> Thanks,
> Matt
> 
> Throughout:
> Alice' => Alice's

done.

> 
> Section 1:
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> SPARQL 1.1 is a set of specifications that provide languages and protocols to query and manipulate RDF [knowledge => should this be data?] on the Web or in an RDF store.
> 

Changed that (following an analogous change we did in SPARQL 1.1 Graph Store HTTP Protocol) to RDF graph content

> SPARQL1.1 now [allow thee => allows three] alternative popular formats to exchange answers to SPARQL queries

done.

> 
> SPARQL 1.1 Federated Query - [This specification => A specification defining] an extension of SPARQL 1.1 Query [Language] for executing queries distributed over different SPARQL endpoints.

done.

> 
> SPARQL 1.1 Service Description - [This document defines => A specification defining] a method for discovering and a vocabulary for describing SPARQL services.

done.

> Section 1.1:
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> In the following, we illustrate the use of SPARQL's languages, protocols, and related specifications [by some => with a] small example.

done.

> Section 2:
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> For instance, one can ask[,] using a SPARQL SELECT query[,] for the identifiers and names of [Alice' => Alice's] friends

done.

> 
> Section 3:
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> The example results use P and N for variable names but the query used ?person and ?name.

fixed.

> Section 4:
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> The SPARQL 1.1 Federated Query document describes [and => an] extension of the basic SPARQL 1.1 Query Language to explicitly delegate certain subqueries to different SPARQL endpoints.

done.

> For instance, in our example, one [might => may] want to find out identifiers of persons with the same names as [Alice' => Alice's] friends on DBPedia[, you may want to combine => . This can be done by combining] a query for the names of friends with a remote call to the SPARQL endpoint at http://dbpedia.org/sparql  using the SERVICE keyword [in a query => remove] as follows:

done.

> 
> Section 6:
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> Operations are provided to update, create [and, => and] remove RDF graphs in a Graph Store.
> 

done.

> the respective syntax used in the WHERE part is derived from the [http://www.w3.org/TR/sparql11-query/  SPARQL1.1 Query Language => SPARQL 1.1 Query Language (http://www.w3.org/TR/sparql11-query/)].

done.

> 
> Section 7:
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> The SPARQL 1.1 Protocol for RDF defines how to transfer SPARQL 1.1 queries and update requests to a SPARQL service via HTTP, [definint => defines] how to map requests to HTTP Get and Post operations and how respective HTTP responses to such requests should look like.
> 

done.


> Section 8:
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> For instance, the following [Given the => remove] HTTP request:
> 

done.

> providing details about e.g. the default dataset of the respective [andpoint => endpoint]
> 

done.

> Section 9:
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> provides means to perform certain operations to manage [a] collection of graphs more directly
> 

changed  to "to manage collection[s]"
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> 
> 

Thanks & sorry again for the delay,
Axel

Received on Friday, 7 October 2011 22:06:09 UTC