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Hi Bob,
> The SPARQL 1.1 Overview document looks like it will be very useful to a > lot of people. I listed some suggested changes below. They're mostly > picky copyediting things. > > Bob DuCharme
First of all, thanks for the feedback, we have tried to address all your comments in the current Editor's draft, see:
http://www.w3.org/2009/sparql/docs/sparql11-overview/Overview.xml
Where we deviate from your suggestions, we explain below.
We'd appreciate if you could acknowledge that this adequately addresses your comment.
Axel, on behalf of the SPARQL WG
> 00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC)Axel Polleres 00:23, 12 December 2011 (UTC) > >(s/foo/bar/ means change foo to bar) > >s/An an/An/, and end that bullet item with a period for consistency with >the other bulleted items.
done.
> >The phrase "SPARQL 1.1" sometimes includes a space and sometimes >doesn't. I think it should include it throughout. See also "RDF1.1".
done.
>"is loaded into a SPARQL service" At this point the reader has no idea >what a SPARQL service is.
added: "(i.e., an HTTP service endpoint that can process SPARQL queries)"
>add colon after "number of their friends"
done.
> >s/which allow to construct/which allow queries to construct/ (or some >other noun besides "queries")
changed to: "by which new RDF graphs can be constructed from a query result;"
>s/DBPedia/DBpedia/ throughout
done.
>"Snoopy"@en (say what the @en is)
While this document shall present SPARQL1.1 at an introductory level, we assume basic familiarity with RDF concepts such as language tags, which is why we left this 'as is'.
> >"in the form of e.g. " "in the form of, for example, "
done.
>Section 6: add carriage returns to query to make it more readable
done.
> >s/via HTTP, defines/via HTTP. It also defines/
done.
>s/and how respective/and what respective/
done.
>s/, could according/could according/
done.
>s/methods are described/methods, are described/
done.
>s/desribes/describes/ (spell check entire document)
done.
>s/for discovering, and/for discovering and/
done.
>s/return and RDF description/return an RDF description/ (and paragraph >is difficult to follow and could use revision)
done.
>POST, GET etc. sometimes initial capped, sometimes all upper-case. Make >it consistent. (I like all upper-case more.)
done.
>s/More such direct HTTP operations/Other direct HTTP operations/
done.
>s/to drop an RDF graph, etc./to drop an RDF graph/ (etc. not necessary >after e.g.)
done.