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Comment LC-1926

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Commenter: Doug Schepers <schepers@w3.org> on behalf of SVG WG

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[Free text description]Document as a wholeSMIL Timesheets 1.0 W3C Working Draft 10 January 2008 Abstract Abstract Status of this document Status of this document Table of contents 1 Introduction 1 Introduction 1.1 Motivation 1.1 Motivation 1.2 Design Rationale 1.2 Design Rationale 1.3 Structure of the Document 1.3 Structure of the Document 2 Overview 2 Overview 3 SMIL Timesheets Basic Concepts 3 SMIL Timesheets Basic Concepts 3.1 Timing and Synchronization 3.1 Timing and Synchronization Figure 1: Timeline of a Timesheets 3.2 Selection Mechanism 3.2 Selection Mechanism Figure 1: Item Selection Process for Nested Items 3.3 Event Model 3.3 Event Model 3.4 Index Functionality 3.4 Index Functionality 4 SMIL Timesheet Specific Elements 4 SMIL Timesheet Specific Elements 4.1 The timesheet element 4.1 The timesheet element Element Attributes Element Attributes The src Attribute The src Attribute The media Attribute The media Attribute Element Content Element Content 4.2 The item element 4.2 The item element Element Attributes Element Attributes The select Attribute The select Attribute The beginInc Attribute The beginInc Attribute Element Functions Element Functions The Index() Function The Index() Function Element Content Element Content 5 SMIL Timing and Synchronization Elements 5 SMIL Timing and Synchronization Elements 5.1 Attributes 5.1 Attributes The begin Attribute The begin Attribute The dur Attribute The dur Attribute The end Attribute The end Attribute The fill Attribute The fill Attribute The endsync Attribute The endsync Attribute The repeatCount Attribute The repeatCount Attribute The repeatDur Attribute The repeatDur Attribute The first Attribute The first Attribute The prev Attribute The prev Attribute The next Attribute The next Attribute The last Attribute The last Attribute 5.2 Elements 5.2 Elements The par Element The par Element The seq Element The seq Element The excl Element The excl Element 6 Prefetch 6 Prefetch 6.1 Attributes 6.1 Attributes The mediaSize Attribute The mediaSize Attribute The mediaTime Attribute The mediaTime Attribute The bandwidth Attribute The bandwidth Attribute 6.2 Elements 6.2 Elements The prefetch Element The prefetch Element 7 Animation 7 Animation 7.1 Attributes 7.1 Attributes The attributeName Attribute The attributeName Attribute The attributeType Attribute The attributeType Attribute The values Attribute The values Attribute The from Attribute The from Attribute The to Attribute The to Attribute The by Attribute The by Attribute The calcMode Attribute The calcMode Attribute The accumulate Attribute The accumulate Attribute The additive Attribute The additive Attribute The origin Attribute The origin Attribute 7.2 Elements 7.2 Elements The animate Element The animate Element The set Element The set Element The animateMotion Element The animateMotion Element The animateColor Element The animateColor Element 7 Event Model 7 Event Model Internal Events Internal Events User Events User Events Event Semantics Event Semantics Index Function Index Function 8 Integration with CSS Layout 8 Integration with CSS Layout Appendix A. References Appendix A. References E.1 Normative References E.1 Normative References [CSS2] E.2 Informative References E.2 Informative References [DOM2Events] [SMIL30] [SVG] [TimesheetsTutorial] [XForms] [XHTML] [XHTMLplusSMIL] Appendix B. Acknowledgements Appendix B. Acknowledgements
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Dear SYMM WG-

This is a Last Call review comment from the SVG WG on the SMIL
Timesheets 1.0 specification, W3C Working Draft 10 January 2008,
http://www.w3.org/TR/2008/WD-timesheets-20080110/ . Please let us know
if you have any questions by replying to www-svg@w3.org.


Typos
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"a-temporal" -> "atemporal"
"Timeshets" -> "Timesheets"
"Timsheets" -> "Timesheets"
"Timesshets" -> "Timesheets"
"meadiaSize" -> "mediaSize"
"meadiaTime" -> "mediaTime"
"allways" -> "always"
"severall" -> "several"
"oredered" -> "ordered"
"attibute" -> "attribute"
"semi-colon" -> "semicolon"

Grammatical and Punctuation Corrections
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"SMIL Timesheets includes the SMIL 3.0 PrefetchControl module and the
SMIL 3.0 BasicAnimation module is used for controlling animations." ->
"SMIL Timesheets includes the SMIL 3.0 PrefetchControl module, and the
SMIL 3.0 BasicAnimation module is used for controlling animations."

"On the other hand, the begin attribute of a children of a excl
timecontainer is "indefinite"." -> "By contrast, the begin attribute of
the children of a excl time container is "indefinite"."

"The par element short for "parallel", defines a simple time grouping in
which multiple elements can play back at the same." -> "The par element,
short for "parallel", defines a simple time grouping in which multiple
elements can play back simultaneously."

"checks, whether the current active child is the first child" -> "checks
whether the current active child is the first child"

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There are several incidents of missing definite or indefinite articles,
or where the article or verb conjugation does not agree with the number.
Here are a few examples:
"The children of the seq element consider the end time of preceding
child as their syncbase."
"Figure 1: Timeline of a Timesheets"
"Host document's" -> "A host document's"
"By default the begin attibute of a children of a seq and a par
timecontainers is "0s"."


Regards-
-Doug Schepers, on behalf of the SVG WG

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