ISSUE-24: need to change general language, rewrite intro sections?
rewriting
need to change general language, rewrite intro sections?
- State:
- CLOSED
- Product:
- Group Note 1 -- General
- Raised by:
- José Manuel Alonso
- Opened on:
- 2009-04-20
- Description:
- Raising this one on behalf of Anna Zhuang. She mentions that she doesn't think the language this document is using is the right one for a guideline produced by a standardization body and also suggests several things to be changed, specially in the introductory sections. See first email attached to this issue.
- Related Actions Items:
ACTION-59 on Kevin Novak to Develop exec summary and abstract and next steps section - due 2009-05-04, closedACTION-60 on Sharron Rush to Help develop exec summary and abstract - due 2009-05-04, closed- Related emails:
- Re: Comments on Working Draft of 'Improving Access to Government...' (from josema@w3.org on 2009-05-01)
- Re: EOWG Comments on 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web', April 2009 (from josema@w3.org on 2009-05-01)
- Re: on rewriting, shorten intros -- Re: Comments on Working Draft of 'Improving Access to Government...' (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-29)
- on rewriting, shorten intros -- Re: Comments on Working Draft of 'Improving Access to Government...' (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-29)
- Re: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-23)
- more intro rewriting -- Re: Group Note -- content and sections outline [forwarding note to DL on request from Jose] (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-22)
- RE: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from Anna.Zhuang@nokia.com on 2009-04-22)
- Re: Suggestion for Introduction (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-21)
- Re: a new member weighs in (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-21)
- Re: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-21)
- Re: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-20)
- ISSUE-24 (rewriting): need to change general language, rewrite intro sections? [Group Note 1 -- General] (from sysbot+tracker@w3.org on 2009-04-20)
Related notes:
many edits over the last couple days, several improvements to text as a whole, simplification and enhancement of asbtract and intro sections, "good enough" for the Group
José Manuel Alonso, 8 May 2009, 11:59:53Display change log