ISSUE-24: need to change general language, rewrite intro sections?

rewriting

need to change general language, rewrite intro sections?

State:

CLOSED

Product:

Group Note 1 -- General

Raised by:

José Manuel Alonso

Opened on:

2009-04-20

Description:

Raising this one on behalf of Anna Zhuang. She mentions that she doesn't think the language this document is using is the right one for a guideline produced by a standardization body and also suggests several things to be changed, specially in the introductory sections. See first email attached to this issue.

Related Actions Items:

• ACTION-59 on Kevin Novak to Develop exec summary and abstract and next steps section - due 2009-05-04, closed
• ACTION-60 on Sharron Rush to Help develop exec summary and abstract - due 2009-05-04, closed

Related emails:

1. Re: Comments on Working Draft of 'Improving Access to Government...' (from josema@w3.org on 2009-05-01)
2. Re: EOWG Comments on 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web', April 2009 (from josema@w3.org on 2009-05-01)
3. Re: on rewriting, shorten intros -- Re: Comments on Working Draft of 'Improving Access to Government...' (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-29)
4. on rewriting, shorten intros -- Re: Comments on Working Draft of 'Improving Access to Government...' (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-29)
5. Re: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-23)
6. more intro rewriting -- Re: Group Note -- content and sections outline [forwarding note to DL on request from Jose] (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-22)
7. RE: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from Anna.Zhuang@nokia.com on 2009-04-22)
8. Re: Suggestion for Introduction (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-21)
9. Re: a new member weighs in (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-21)
10. Re: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-21)
11. Re: 'Improving Access to Government through Better Use of the Web' review comments (from josema@w3.org on 2009-04-20)
12. ISSUE-24 (rewriting): need to change general language, rewrite intro sections? [Group Note 1 -- General] (from sysbot+tracker@w3.org on 2009-04-20)

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